Sunday, October 3, 2010

Bad News Blogfest

Thank you to Francine at Romancing the Blog for hosting the

Instructions: Write about a character receiving bad news.
(My character doesn't exactly receive bad news -
she kinda figures it out herself. I hope that counts!)

The crash still resounded in my ears, but I knew the room was in silence now. Well, almost in silence. An eerie scratching sound remained as a metal soup ladel swung back and forth against the wall, then fell with a clang to join the rest of the utensils I'd pulled down in my useless attempt to slow my fall.

I had fallen so hard - right through the flimsy ceiling and onto the tiled kitchen floor - that I was sure it should hurt more. It didn't though, not at all, and that relieved me. Everything was a relief now.

Roy was gone. Dead. Never to hurt me again. Laura had shot him as he'd chased me across the attic, my terrified screams doing nothing to slow his pursuit.

Too bad he'd had to fall on top of me as he died.

I remembered managing to just twist out of the way, but my balance was off and I'd fallen too. Crashed down into the kitchen just like him. He'd landed on the table though. I could see his swollen arm dangling over the edge.

Hurried footsteps sounded in the hallway. That would be Laura.

"Are you all right?" she gasped, running into the kitchen.

"Yes," I said quietly, still not moving off the floor. Everything was all right now. Even though I was staring up into a great big hole in the ceiling, everything was all right.

"Come, let's get out of the kitchen," said Laura, holding her hand out to help me up. "I don't want to be anywhere near him."

I tried to reach for her hand - nothing happened. I tried to move my arms to my sides so I could push myself up - nothing happened.

"What?" she asked, seeing the alarm in my face. "What is it? Do you feel pain?"

"No," I whispered, panic tightening my chest. "I don't feel anything."


Ellie said...

I didn't see that ending coming! Awesome.

N. R. Williams said...

I thought she was dead too, but now, maybe paralyzed. Nicely done.
N. R. Williams, fantasy author

Francine said...


Wow, a shooting, dead body, and MC paralysed! Good News overshadowed by Bad News, but a rip-roaring mental description of events leading to hole in the ceiling. Great job. ;)


Rachel Morgan said...

Thanks, guys! It was fun to write :-)

Quinn said...

I don't know why, but at the beginning of this I had the feeling that the MC was a boy. Once I got to the end, I thought the MC was a girl. I think I may just be too tired (it's after 2am here).

At first, I thought the MC was dead. I didn't see the paralysis coming. Loved that ending.

Rachel Morgan said...

Hmm, I didn't think about there being confusion over the gender in the beginning...

Yeah, you should really get to bed!

J.C. Martin said...

Uh-oh...I'm no doctor, but that doesn't sound good!

Elizabeth Mueller said...

You tease, Rachel. I love the intro and how you hooked me as a reader. I want to read more! Thanks for following my bloggie! *hugs*

Cinette said...

I was curious about her thinking it SHOULD have hurt more, but still didn't see the paralysis coming. Great job! Lots covered in a tight package.

Brenda Drake said...

Chilling. To survive such an attack and then be paralyzed -- definitely bad news. Great post! :D

The Golden Eagle said...

I love the ending! Being paralyzed isn't good of course, but I never saw it coming. :)

Rachel Morgan said...

Yay! So glad I managed to write something that wasn't totally obvious :-)

Elena Solodow said...

Whoa - talk about a cliffhanger! Loved this.