Wednesday, May 18, 2011

Flash Fiction: An Explosive Drabble

I found this image here.

Gregor stepped out from the shadow of the warehouse and strode towards the woman. She lay on the ground, limp like a ragdoll, blood pooling in the dirt around her head. Gregor settled on his haunches beside her, his dust-coated boots grinding against the loose gravel.
“You lose, Maria. Everything you worked so hard for is now mine.”
Come... closer,” she whispered.
He leaned in, not caring what she had to say, only wishing to watch her die. Her hand fell open at her side, revealing a black, rectangular device with a single button.
"You lose."
She pressed the button.


PS. In case you're wondering, a drabble is a short piece of writing exactly 100 words in length. Hope you liked it!

PPS. Don't forget the Power of Tension Blogfest I'm hosting next week with Cally Jackson!


20 comments:

Angela Felsted said...

This rocks!

Winnie said...

WOW....I want more!

Laura said...

fantastic piece... really gripping (cant believe what you did with 100 words!)
Lx

Su said...

Nice! I'm with Winnie-- I want more!

Cally Jackson said...

Awesome work, Rachel. It makese wonder what lead to this point. :-)

Jeigh said...

Cool! I've never heard of a drabble before. I'll have to give it a try. Good work!

Lisa Potts said...

Wonderful! I've never heard the term Drabble before. 100 words is tough, but this is really good. Thanks for sharing.

Laura Josephsen said...

Ooh, drabble! Nicely done! I got to the end and was all "Nooo, I don't want her to die!" and at the same time "SHE ROCKS AS SHE'S DYING!"

Nice that you could make me think that in so few words. :D

Amy said...

Love it! :)

Nas Dean said...

Some more, please? You can't just leave us hanging!

hot girl said...

veri nice.

Rachel Morgan said...

Thanks for all the positive comments :-)

Talli Roland said...

Ooh! The drama! I want more, as well.

Michael Di Gesu said...

TERRIFIC!

You definitely nailed this drabble.

I never heard of this term, but I like it.

Carol Riggs said...

Wonderful drabble, great job!! You got tension and conflict in, and a bwa-haha twist of an ending. I love it!

Ellie said...

Wow. Short, sharp, and shocking. Loved it!

Ellie Garratt

Kari Marie said...

I loved this drabble! What a funny word to describe such gripping content.

Kittie Howard said...

Fabulous! Makes me want to read more.

The Thumber said...

I totally loved this. And in only 100 words? AWESOME.

Lesley said...

Awesome drabble! I learnt a new word today:)