Monday, March 5, 2012

Second Campaigner Challenge: 5 Prompts, 5 Sentences

Despite the fact that I want to literally jump up and down with crazy excited happiness over the fact that my series is lauching TODAY (insert multitudes of !!), I managed to force myself to sit still for long enough to type an entry for this awesomely challenging challenge.
(PS - if you visit my LAUNCH POST you can WIN STUFF!) <--- please, please visit my launch post!

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Okay, so I used one or two elements from each of the five prompts to create a five-sentence flash fiction piece of under 200 words. (The words in bold indicate what element I've used from each prompt)



With every painful throb of my heart, more blood spills from the gash in my thigh. It runs down my leg; a bright red stain pooling on the concrete beneath me. Graham crawls out from the shelter of the bridge, seemingly oblivious to the spray of rain that drenches him within seconds. He paws through the rubble, his fingers searching desperately. Through a haze of pain I see him point his arm toward the sky, pull the trigger of the flare gun, and watch the dazzling sparks soar across the sky.


I wasn't entirely sure if a flare gun would work when used in the rain (since I've never actually used one myself!), so I Googled it, and someone seemed to think that yes, it would work. Anyway, if not, let's pretend it's a special flare gun that can be used in the rain!

I'm number 12 on the list :-)
 

41 comments:

Michael Di Gesu said...

Yay!!!! Congrats on the launch!!!!!

Great entry.... Well written with amazing tension....

Unknown said...

Well done! In just few words you captured my attention and drew me in.

Meradeth Houston said...

Great snippet of a story there--very intriguing!

Morgan said...

Fab writing, as always, my dear ;)

And LOL to the googling! Loved it. Annnnd so exciting with your book! You must be in a whirlwind!!! :D

Sabrina A. Fish said...

Way to use those prompts, lady. It's fiction, if you want your flare gun to work in those conditions than more power to you!

New follower. So happy to meet you.

Melissa said...

Enjoyed reading your entry. And congrats on the Creepy Hollow launch!

Tara Tyler said...

great scene! you picked a harder prompt and did well!

Cherie Reich said...

Great entry! Love the pace for it and how you incorporated the images. :)

Skippy Bo Bippy said...

Ah google. every author's best friend, next to a good thesaurus of course. ;) Great work, I think you chose the hardest prompt.. and knocked it out of the park.

YelenaC said...

Congratulations on the launch!
Great entry. I love how you incorporated all the prompts. I also love that you actually went online to search on how a flare gun would work in the rain, that awesome! :)

Unknown said...

Thank you for all the comments, dear bloggers!

Sheena-kay Graham said...

Congrats on being published Rachel! Joshua on his blog Vive Le Nerd wrote about your book. I really like it and will check out more on it. Funny, he promotes a Rachel (Novelelette: Guardian)and I'm promoting another author Rachael Dixon (Novel: Slippery Souls).

Nancy Thompson said...

Nicely done! I don;t think I could ever write something in only 5 sentences. I'm kinda jealous now! Good job! I'm entry #5.

Carrie Butler said...

Very creative! I loved it. :D

Christy Farmer said...

Congrats on the launch, Rachel! I love how you did this in 5 sentences. Nice job! :-)

Andora Brokaw said...

lol. I wouldn't have questioned the flare gun in the rain if you hadn't pointed it out. Good job with a hard challenge!

Gwen Gardner said...

Oh man, you made the challenge look so easy! Well done. And CONGRATULATIONS on the release of your book. I'm so happy for you:) *high fives and hugs*

Unknown said...

lol! Anything can happen in a story! I thought the imagery was great for such a short piece! Good job!

Liza said...

Congratulations on your launch! I enjoyed your challenge...since flare guns are often used on boats...I'm guessing you might be ok! Great job. (#30)

Jenn said...

Nice job, Rachel. Love the special flare gun note. ;)
Congrats and good luck on your release.

Unknown said...

Congratulations on launching your book.I'm lookingforwardto reading it! Good work on your entry. Very descriptive.

Randy said...

Nicely done. It really fits withing the parameters of the challenge.

J E Fritz said...

I liked the imagery you used. I could definitely see how you used the prompts. Way to go on putting it in five sentences. That challenge was beyond me.

Unknown said...

Your writing is incredible. Great story in so few words. :D

Sarah Tokeley said...

I like the way you made use of every one of those sentences :-)

Cally Jackson said...

Man I'm SO impressed. Awesome work!! :-)

Unknown said...

Nice use of the prompts! Well done!

Elise Fallson said...

Great imagery here! You transported me right into your story , great job!

Nick Wilford said...

There's a lot going on in those five sentences, I definitely want to know more. Very well done, I couldn't figure out how to do that challenge at all!

Traci Kenworth said...

I think the flare would work. Nicely done.

Alynza Smith said...

Your writing seems so effortless! I mean that in a good way lol. Great job and it all flows together nicely. :)

Anonymous said...

Hi, Rachel!
I judged this round and wanted to let you know that your entry is shortlisted for the next round. Best of luck!

Anonymous said...

Very nicely done...did not see that coming, and I love surprises!

Mina Burrows said...

Very cool! All 5 too. Wow! Great job.

Claire Hennessy said...

Wow, that was succinct! Excellent to include so many prompts in so few words. Well done. I just was not inspired with this challenge - the first one I haven't entered. Congrats on your book launch :)

Deniz Bevan said...

Congratulations on your series launch!!

Love how you used all the prompts and came out with an interesting story. Hope they get rescued!

Tess Julia said...

Nice! Sounds like a desperate situation!

Anonymous said...

I love how you chose one small element of each prompt instead of using them as a whole . . . what an awesome and creative approach! Great job!

Anonymous said...

Congrats on the launch!

Interesting entry for Challenge #2!

#46

Jessica Salyer said...

Congrats on the launch! Nice job on the challenge. I love how you used the prompts.

Tia Bach said...

You took on the one I thought was the hardest and did an amazing job with it!

Congrats again on your launch and wishing you much success.

I'm #106.